i liked this a lot
otherwise a little too much enemies
hoo the hell am i to talk??!?!??!!?
my DDA sux

I think, with DDAs, most poeple like to see two main things:
N being moved around in interesting, unexpected ways (like thwumps pushing him into walls, or trapdoors closing on him).
And close calls, where it looks like N should have been killed, but just survives.
Basically, try and make it look like something you wouldn't see in regular playing, if you know what I mean.
Anyway, nice first map. But, ease off on the big groups of objects, as it usually doesn't look very nice.

to many objects and little simple. but for a first try not too bad

No.